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This is a really wonderful concept! Largely well-done, too. Although I did stumble in a couple of places when reading it. I only bring that up because, even though it's great, I think it could be stronger. If you're interested, I'd be happy to share my thoughts. But if the poem is living on its own now and you're happy with what it's doing, there's no need to change anything.
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