Love

12w • ©

Love is a chain
A chain only broken with pain
This unforgiving chain reminds the broken only to break them more 
For loves tales I found so sweet 
To realize they were only pretty lies
Love is a lovely lie
A lie so sweet 
It hurts so deep

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k3333

12w

I see You are a Rick and Morty fan. I invite you to read my Rick's development. 

k3333

12w

Strong metaphor.
I would improve the rhythm of the poem, the consistency of stanza lengths, and correct the mistake loves tales to love's tales, unless it’s a deliberate choice to create heaviness.
Respect for the free verse.
Practice makes perfect.

amber_rose35

12w

Please comment any changes you would prefer to make my writing better!😊💕