lifeinslomo's commented: Ofc, some poems i throw it out there and hope it survives too 🤣 Though, there are certain poems I'm mindful about. You guessed right. The problem is somewhere between the lines you've quoted. I had a pretty decent idea there before I ended up with that. But as it is, i discarded it because I didn't feel the tingle i get when I come up with a pretty good line lol. English isn't my main language and it sucks you know cos it shows. I'll work on the line breaks more. Thank you for your expert eyes

Ofc, some poems i throw it out there and hope it survives too 🤣 Though, there are certain poems I'm mindful about. You guessed right. The problem is somewhere between the lines you've quoted. I had a pretty decent idea there before I ended up with that. But as it is, i discarded it because I didn't feel the tingle i get when I come up with a pretty good line lol. English isn't my main language and it sucks you know cos it shows. I'll work on the line breaks more. Thank you for your expert eyes 

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a_p_wyndham

Absolutely do not sell yourself short. You do a wonderful job!

If English is failing you, maybe you could even borrow from your native tongue. A little dip into another language can add some flavor! But it isn't necessary. Just another thought. 

I'm sure it will come to you! 